I have spent quite some time working on a story. I finally got it all out. I know it’s not perfect, and there are some things in it that I wish to refine, but now I ask YOU. What do YOU think?

I don’t know how many of you read the story, or even how many of you there are. I just know that I get several hits on this site, so SOMEONE must be reading.

The story was posted in different chapters on the following dates:

Chapter 1: 12/12/07
Chapter 2: 12/17/07
Chapter 3: 12/28/07
Chapter 4: 1/6/08
Chapter 5: 1/10/08
Chapter 6: 1/13/08
Chapter 7: 1:17/08
Chapter 8: 1/20/08
Chapter 9: 1/25/08
Chapter 10: 1/29/08
Chapter 11: 2/7/08
Chapter 12: 2/16/08
Chapter 13: 2/19/08
Chapter 14: 2/21/08
Chapter 15: 2/24/08
Chapter 16: 2/27/08
Chapter 17: 3/10/08
Chapter 18: 3/22/08

I am looking for constructive feedback here. Just a “It was wonderful” or “It sucked” isn’t really helpful. What did you like? What did you not understand? What would be helpful? Let me know.

So, please, if you would be so kind, let me know what you think. And sometime down the road, I will post MY CRITIQUE of my first literary foray.

My results are back from the wellness testing. Actually, they have been back for a while, but I have been asking professionals their opinion about the results. Here is what I have found out:

In a nutshell, everything looks good. Almost everything thing is within “normal” range. (Wait a minute; I’m normal?!? There must be some mistake!) My blood sugar was a tad low (71). Considering diabetes runs in my family, that is probably actually a good thing. My cholesterols look good, with the right amount of “good” cholesterol. Something called EOSINOPHIL was a little high. Normal range is 0-8%. Mine was 9. I have yet to find someone who can explain what that means. Oh, yes. They did say something about losing weight. I explained that I used to weigh over 300 pounds, and therefore carry a lot of loose skin. We did talk about diet and exercise and such.

However, weight is a problem. I have been gaining, and I’ve been at a loss to understand why. It was suggested, however, that perhaps I should limit my consumption of pop. Okay, I give up. I have bought a couple of cases of water and the Crystal Light powder to go with them. I’ve got to do something. Despite staying on my diet, I have gained 20 pounds in the last few months! That can’t all be because of menopause. In addition, I am going to work on my physical activity.

To help me do this, I have created a binder with a page that I fill out every day. In the past, I just wrote down what I ate. Now, each page will include the date, my weight, medications, all food AND drink, amount and type of exercise, and anything else that I feel may be important.

I’m staying on this. I am NOT giving up my quest to be healthy.

Here’s to looking and feeling good!

Master is back from his travels. As is my custom, I got up one morning and said good morning. He did not answer, so I assumed he was not at the computer. Eventually I got up to take a shower.

Usually, I leave him a little note “taking a shower” or whatever when I leave the computer. For some reason, I did not do it this time. When I came back, I had a message from him:

Master Bennet: hi
Master Bennet: CUM FOR ME

Then he logged out. Damn. I missed my chance. Not only to talk to Master, but to cum for him immediately on command.

Chapter 18
They spent two hours making their way through the rubble to the other side. The three suited men followed until they were on the other side of the debris, then they left them. From her vantage point, Lora could now see that she was not just a building, but a complex, with several buildings of various sizes scattered about.

“What is this place?” she asked.

“It’s time to tell you everything,” Jaric replied. “But first we must go where we can talk”.

As Jaric led her to another of the buildings, Lora looked around. She saw several strange vehicles, and people seemed to be dressed very strangely. There were many people in the suits of the men that had found her, but many others were dressed in tunic type clothing of various colors. The clothes seemed functional, yet with added colors and accents that seemed to be up to the individual wearing them. Where am I? she thought.

Soon Lora and Jaric were seated in large chairs in an office. They sat facing each other, across from an empty desk. Jaric took her hands in his..

“Remember I told you that this was about finding your destiny?” asked Jaric. “Well, this place is called Interlace. Its function is to…well, do you believe in soulmates?” asked Jaric.

She was taken aback by that question. A soulmate was something she had always hoped for, but never seemed even close to finding. “I…I don’t know,” she said finally.

“Well, here we not only believe in soulmates,” Jaric said, “but we work hard to seek them out. Interlace’s purpose is to identify the soulmate of an individual, and bring that person here, to be united with their other half. That is a person’s greatest destiny.”

“That’s why I was brought here?” she asked. “I am meant to be someone’s mate?”

“Much, much more than that. Maybe soulmate isn’t the right word. When the two people who are supposed to be together come together, a bond forms. This is a spiritual bond that the two people were destined to share. Without it, neither individual can ever be complete.”

“I have never heard of such a thing,” Lora said.

“No, because we are not exactly from the same place,” Jaric said. He let that sink in.

“Are you telling me you’re from another planet???” she asked, finding it nearly impossible to believe herself.

“Not another planet, exactly, more like another dimension. Our worlds are very similar, but not exactly the same. That’s why you never received any newspapers, TV or computer, although our world has equivalents of those things.”

Lora thought back on the strange vehicles and clothing she had seen as she walked between the buildings. “If I had, I would have realized I was in a completely different place.”

“That’s right. But now it is time for you to understand that.”

“So, when do I meet this supposed soulmate of mine,” Lora asked.

“You don’t know?” Jaric asked. “You can’t already feel the bond? Do you not remember the dream? The one we shared?”

“The dance,” she whispered.

“Yes, the dance,” he replied.

“I have been brought here to be with you,” she said.

“Yes. Interlace is just a holding facility, allowing you to learn about and accept your amorato.”

“Amorato?”

“Soulmate. At least, that’s as close a word as I can come to. I am your amorato. You are my amorata. We are bonded together. Because of that bond, I knew you had survived the fire. I also knew when the firers found you, because you were so scared of them. I felt your fear. I came for you.”

Just then, a tall, then man dressed in a dark gray tunic and slacks entered. He seemed to be struggling to find the right words. Hauntly cleared his throat. “I’m glad to see you were right and your amarata is okay. We, ah, can find another room…”

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“No!” said Lora. “I don’t want to be locked up in a room again.”

“No, Lora, that’s over.”

“Really,” said Hauntly, “I think…”

But Jaric held his hand up and stopped him mid sentence. “That’s over,” he repeated.

“Now what?” Lora asked in a voice barely above a whisper.
He stood up, held his hand out to her. “Now we go home. To our home. Together.”

She looked at him for a moment, then took his hand. Together they walked out the door.

Just a short message to let you know that posting will be delayed slightly. I am having problems with my keyboard and will have to buy a new one. Hopefully, I will have the faulty equipment replaced withing a day or two. I am typing this at the library.

And I was going to post the last chapter in my story today, too!